User:Jpierr02/Metal Tetramesityl Compounds, M = V, Mo, Ru, Os, Rh, Ir/Karamoulton Peer Review

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Jpierr02
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Lead
There is no short "lead" just a jump straight into the introduction. I feel like this would intimidate potential readers. A few sentences, just mentioning the general structure of the complex and the various metals used might be helpful. This would also be an opportunity to lay out the remainder of the article/what sections you are going to include. A general sort of figure of the complexes or something interesting relevant to them might help draw in potential readers. Also the chemical formula might be helpful for people that didn't know what a mesityl ligand is (me).

Content
Introduction

- Definitely a figure here or in the lead would help the reader to visualize.

- Maybe provide some general d electron count information or a crystal structure or chemdraw here.

Metal Tetramesityl compounds

I am a little confused by this section. Is there a direct relation to the complexes that you mention that I am missing? I am just confused because none of them have Mes ligands, and are different metals from the ones listed in the title. So I'm just not seeing the connection from the V, Mo, Ru, Os, Rh, Ir (Mes) compounds to the ones you mention/their applications. I think probably a few sentences highlighting the connection of them could fix this.

Synthesis of Metal Tetramesityl compounds

- I think chemdraws would be very helpful here.

- The molecular structure images are nice.

- A historical context of when each compound was made/by who/what group would be good.

- The detail in the Tetramesityl iridium section might be a little too much, I don't think a description of the workup is entirely necessary.

- I know it's unlikely you have access to the same level of information for each compound, but including the same level of detail for each, in an organized way, would help the reader process the information and see the differences that changing the metal makes. For example, if you have more detail about the structure of the tetramesityl vanadium, add it to match the others.

- The molecular structures are good visualizations but I think some chemdraws would be helpful because it would enable you to see the structure of the ligands; it's a little hard to discern that from the ball and stick model. Including the chemical formulas would also help with this a little.

- Are there any applications (other than the ones mentioned earlier) in catalysis / what reactions do these complexes undergo / why are people making them. I think an applications / reactivity section would be useful if there is information about any of this.

- I also noticed Os, Mo, and Rh are not included in the synthesis section, are they not reported?

Sources and References
- All the links work which is nice.

- I think some more sources, to add in the stuff missing in content (reactivity, the other metal complex synthesis) would make the article much more comprehensive.

- Somewhat already mentioned this, but mentioning the name/group/year in the part of the article where you present what they did can help the reader have a better idea of the context of the chemistry.

Organization
I think the organization is a little confusing. I am not sure the importance of what is being discussed in the first part of the "Metal Tetramesityl Compounds" section, but maybe this would become more clear if it had a more descriptive title. I think many of the terms used should either be explained or linked to the corresponding wikipedia page, if it exists. Some of these include "molecular qubits," "quantum information," "diluent matrix," Some of the content in the introduction might work better in an "Applications" section or something similar. There are definitely other terms that could be linked to their pages as well.

Images and Media
I like the molecular structures but (and I might just be an overly visual learner) I think that chemdraws for at least the general complex and some of the synthesis presented would be very helpful. At the least, present all the synthesis in the same chemical reaction format you did for the Vanadium one. I think also, if there are pictures that help illustrate the applications you talk about, like molecular qubits, that could be helpful in understanding.