User:Jramo059/Shanidar Cave/KirstenSW821 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jramo059


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jramo059/Shanidar_Cave?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Shanidar Cave

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

After reviewing the users' sandbox, and referencing the article that the user wants to add too, I can already tell that there is a good amount of information that should be added, as the user has already been doing. Referring to the user's sandbox, it was very clear to notice where the user was wanting to add, and what new sections and information the user wanted to add. Right away I noticed that the user was wanting to add to the section from the article called "Shanidar 5." With the quick statement that is going to be included for the article, I thought it was a brilliant contribution to the section, as it clears up a statement about Shanidar 1 that the original section had. This quick statement for the section is not biased, and it is clear to understand, with a reliable source to back up the statement as well.

For the other sections that the user wishes to add, that is included in their sandbox, I think are also great ways to add to the original article. I noticed that in the original article, there is only one mention of Shanidar 9 that the user has made a new section for. I think making a new section for this will help improve and strengthen the article as a whole, because it will clear up the previous, one quick statement, the article already had for Shanidar 9. I do believe though that furthering the new section there will need to be sources and references for the statements that will be included, especially since the statement already there also mentions Shanidar 4, which is already a large section in the original article.

Looking more closely at the last section that the user wants to add about "Diet," I think will be an interesting section to include in this article. Reviewing the original article I could not find any mention to food or a diet of the Hominins found in The Shanidar Cave, so I believe this new added section will improve the article as a whole. After reading the added section, I found that it was not biased, and it was well-written, because it made me want to read more. The topic itself is very interesting, and expanding on it will really improve the article as a whole. It will be especially interesting if there are any references to specific fossils like through Shanidar 1-5 that mention any certain type of diet that could've been found. Being able to relate diet back to the fossils already mentioned in the article will help strengthen this added information. Finding more sources to back up statements, especially specific ones that include a date or a specific fossil, will help make the statement reliable. From this being said, I think finding more references for certain statements and adding to everything that has been mentioned in the sandbox, this will be a great addition to the original article!