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Article evaluation

While looking at the "Fresh Off the Boat" article, I noticed that the very first section of the talk page was overrun but somewhat condescending comments. In the training modules, it says to be respectful and helpful on the talk page in order to be efficient and correct what is incorrect. However, the point of the edits was made unclear by the delivery within the talk page. On the talk page, I also noticed that one of the editors was unsure of one of the character's -- Eddie Huang's -- full name. They said that "Edwyn" was "probably right," even though the listed source does not support that fact. Additionally, comedian Ali Wong is a writer for the show, however she is not mentioned anywhere on the article page or the talk page.

Before, I thought that conversations would either disappear or be resolved on the talk page, but I noticed that they stay until they are deleted. For example, there used to be a section in the article about Chinese names, but because the information and sources were wrong, it was deleted. However, the section on the talk page remained.

Wikipedia Topic Selection Round 1 (Oct 11)

1) Modify article on Lisa Su

-Lisa Su is an electrical engineer and business executive; she currently holds both CEO and president titles at Advanced Micro Devices (AMD). She is qualified for this project because she is a woman and immigrant from Taiwan in the fields of technology and engineering.

-I plan to expand her existing article 5-fold; I will do this by adding more information about her accomplishments and contributions to technology, especially within her time working at IBM. Additionally, I plan to either fix or remove the multiple sources that lead to errors within the reference section. I only know a little bit of Mandarin, but I think I can use what I know to fact check some of the information written in the article as well as add new information from sites that are in Mandarin.

https://www.amd.com/Documents/lisa-su-letter.pdf

https://www.fastcompany.com/90229663/how-amds-ceo-lisa-su-managed-to-turn-the-tech-company-around

2) Modify article on Jerome Adams

-Jerome Adams is an anesthesiologist involved in the US military. He is qualified for this project because he is a Black American within the field of medicine

-I plan to expand his existing article 5-fold. I will do so by adding more about his personal life, military involvement, and his general achievement. There is little to no depth within explanations given on his article page. Additionally, his talk page is currently empty.

https://www.asahq.org/about-asa/newsroom/news-releases/2017/08/jerome-adams-confirmation

https://bha.businessgrouphealth.org/speakers/jerome-adams/

3) Modify article on Magdalena Zernicka-Goetz

-Magdalena Zernicka-Goetz is a Professor who is teaching mammalian development and stem cell biology at the University of Cambridge. She is qualified for this project because she is a woman in science.

-I plan to expand her existing article 5-fold. The current categories lacking information are education, career and research, and personal life. The personal life section is currently empty. I can take this opportunity to reveal the appropriate amount of information without gendering her background information and following the trend of many other articles about women.

https://www.thetimes.co.uk/article/a-life-in-the-day-magdalena-zernicka-goetz-the-pioneering-scientist-dvg9fb5ng

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7cZhuXTvfis (leaving this here to further my own knowledge about her)

4) Modify article on Doris Taylor

-Doris Taylor is a biomedical engineer working on regenerative medicine. She is qualified for this project because she is a woman within the fields of science, medicine, and engineering.

-I plan to expand her existing article 5-fold. I want to add information on her early life, personal life, research, and accomplishments.

http://www.miromatrix.com/newsroom/2017/8/7/doris-taylor-rejoins-miromatrix-as-scientific-advisor

https://www.ahajournals.org/doi/abs/10.1161/circresaha.118.313456

ASSIGNMENT (due Oct 16) Exercise 4: Add a citation (individual; modify an existing Wikipedia page): Lisa Su

-Fixed source 1, was previously a dead link

-Fixed source 14, was previously a dead link

-Deleted source 13, was a repeat of source 14 with a dead link, thus making source 14 now source 13

ASSIGNMENT (due Oct 16) Exercise 5: Copyedit (individual; modify an existing Wikipedia page): Lisa Su

-Added her parents' Chinese names

-Minor grammatical changes within "Early life and education" section

ASSIGNMENT (due Oct 21) Exercise 6: Finalize your topic (individual or group; Sandbox)

Angel Alcala is a Filipino biologist who is renowned for his invention of artificial coral reefs around Southeast Asia. He is responsible for assisting in the recovery and conservation of the aquatic areas in the Philippines that have dominated by fisheries. His Wikipedia article is relatively short and doesn’t really elaborate on his accomplishments in conservation biology. It did mention his discovery of almost fifty reptiles and amphibians in the Philippines. The article briefly summarizes his educational background, and it doesn’t even reverence his doctorate despite vaguely mentioning his Ph.D. His page was last edited on September 10, 2018.

-added new source in text (https://www.famousscientists.org/angel-alcala/)

-minor grammar editing and wording changes to fix choppiness

ASSIGNMENT (Oct 25) Exercise 7: Start drafting (individual or group; Sandbox)

-see all notes in new "research" section

ASSIGNMENT (Nov 1) Exercise 8: Continue improving (individual or group; Sandbox)

-drafting Research section


 * added subcategories, still having a tough time wording research into concise information

-added Education section

-restructured so that information is in more appropriate locations

-added Awards and Other Accomplishments section

-Goals to accomplish by 12/6/18


 * Add at least 3 new references
 * Link at least 2 new articles within this one


 * Lead Section
 * Combine the opening section and the Biography section
 * Fix non-working references
 * Fix grammatical errors and awkward wording
 * Redistribute information that belongs in other sections
 * Add at least 2 new points of information in Infobox
 * Model after other scientists' pages (James Watson, Eugenie Clark, Sylvia Earle)
 * Research section
 * Add at least 1 new subheading
 * Add 1-2 images
 * Add at least 1 new section
 * Possibly early life, or family life

ASSIGNMENT (Nov 13) Exercise 10: Respond to your peer review (individual or group; Sandbox)

-What were the problems that he were trying to solve?

-Did he collaborate with anyone within his research? What else did he discover?

-Talk about the species that he discovered

-Expand more on his research

Above are the elements of feedback given during class, since our article was not previously peer reviewed. All are valuable points! Before this time, I didn't think to expand upon the species that Angel Alcala discovered; this could be great information to provide context for readers. I think Tim and I will be able to find out the problems that he had tried to solve, especially when looking more into his peer-reviewed article. Although these are all doable improvements, the most difficult would be expanding on his research section. Alcala has written many peer-reviewed articles; however, these articles are about his work and not him; therefore, it can be very hard to find credible sources about Alcala and his personal life. However, we will dig up as much information as we can. Overall, it has been a bit difficult finding information about Alcala, since he is from the Philippines and a bit older in age. However, I am glad that he has many peer-reviewed articles about the work that he has done for marine sciences!

ASSIGNMENT (Nov 29) Exercise 12: Polish your work (individual or group; Wikipedia page)

To polish our work, we started by fixing the article's first source, which had been coming up with errors since before we started editing the live page. We also greatly improved our "Research" section. Much of the section was written informally without citation, so we polished our writing within the sandbox and properly added sources. After, we moved it to the live page. We still have some bullet points in the sandbox, so we hope to soon convert it into paragraphs that we will transfer onto the live page. We also transferred the new "Awards and Other Accomplishments" section to the live page, which we plan to grow in the near future. We also fixed the duplicated references that we had. Unfortunately, the talk page of the live article did not have any responses from other Wikipedians; it would be helpful if other contributors on the page could give us feedback! Additionally, Tim and I have been the only people to edit this article to date since September 10, 2018.

GOALS UNTIL FINISH


 * add at least 1 image
 * potentially add family life/early life section (if enough info)
 * link at least one wiki article in each section/subsection
 * try to add at least 3 new references

ARTICLE START

WP:COPYARTICLE, old revision of Angel Alcala which this editor made live in Dec 2018