User:Jrhassing20/Flint sit-down strike/HistoricalBuildingBlocks Peer Review

I think that your article is really good! It has a lot of basic and pertinent information that flushes out the reader's understanding of the strike as a whole. I think that adding more sources within the first two paragraphs would be beneficial, so this way the reader has a breadcrumb trail of where information was gathered from and can do further reading if they want to. I think this helps to make your writing and information more cohesive; I do notice on the original article they lack those sources, so yeah, I think finding additional supporting information will back up the already solid research. In addition to that, maybe in the conclusion adding information either about the longer term impacts of the strike on the labor movement as a whole would be an interesting note or anywhere adding more connecting information to events, if any relate to the strike, that is. Ultimately, I think the article is really solid, but adding secondary sources to flush out the research more would probably a great course of action thus far. I think even within the images adding sources to that or elaborating more on what the images are depicting could flush the article out more as well. This way the reader is better able to put an image to the event, if there are applicable images. The sources to those images also just give the images and context more credibility. However, I think that there is great information here! Y'all have done a good job, I think!

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jrhassing20


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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jrhassing20/Flint_sit-down_strike?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Flint sit-down strike

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that your article is really good! It has a lot of basic and pertinent information that flushes out the reader's understanding of the strike as a whole. I think that adding more sources within the first two paragraphs would be beneficial, so this way the reader has a breadcrumb trail of where information was gathered from and can do further reading if they want to. I think this helps to make your writing and information more cohesive; I do notice on the original article they lack those sources, so yeah, I think finding additional supporting information will back up the already solid research. In addition to that, maybe in the conclusion adding information either about the longer term impacts of the strike on the labor movement as a whole would be an interesting note or anywhere adding more connecting information to events, if any relate to the strike, that is. Ultimately, I think the article is really solid, but adding secondary sources to flush out the research more would probably a great course of action thus far.

I think even within the images adding sources to that or elaborating more on what the images are depicting could flush the article out more as well. This way the reader is better able to put an image to the event, if there are applicable images. The sources to those images also just give the images and context more credibility. However, I think that there is great information here! Y'all have done a good job, I think!