User:Jrichter0356/The Great Slave Auction/Livlock Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) Jrichter0356
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Jrichter0356/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? no
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? no
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? yes
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? The lead is good, however, it is not in correct format to be transferred to the cite.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? I think it is relevant to the topic, however it should be split up between slave background and information about the sale itself
 * Is the content added up-to-date? yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? no

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? I would say words like "perfect" sound opinionated and I would review to make sure language is not biased before transferring over
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? no
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? I would maybe add more about who is going to the slave auction to purchase slaves. what kind of people, where are they coming from etc...
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? no

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? yes
 * Are the sources current? yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work? yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? I think this is a very rough draft in the sense it is in a list format, make sure to form into a paragraph that flows
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? yes there are some errors such as forgetting to capitalized sentence beginnings
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? The author is only adding to one section, therefore there is not much organization. However, I would split the slave and buyer information into two separate paragraphs

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? I think this information is important to add, it is important to know they were gifted in their trades
 * What are the strengths of the content added? I like how the information tells more about where the slaves came from
 * How can the content added be improved? I wish there was more information about the sale itself, it took a while to get into the information

Overall evaluation
Good start to new information! The main concern I had when reading over was that I had a hard time imagining flow between the points you made in your list. Make sure all information flows together when transferring it over.