User:Jrrwfw/Human zoo/Gigirojas Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jrrwfw


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jrrwfw/Human_zoo?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Human zoo
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Human zoo

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead to this article is good as it makes clear what content will be present in the article. The lead is concise and is easy for the reader to follow which is very important. The content added was very relevant and it helped fill in some gaps the article had. My peer added why the trope began in the first place and I think that overall was very beneficial. The information added helped readers have that small bit of information that was missing. The tone of the article was neutral and I didn't feel as if I was being persuaded to feel or think a certain way. I saw some comments on the talk page being concerned with the neutrality of the article so I would maybe double check to make sure. I tried out a few of the links in the article and the ones I clicked seemed to be working. I think that it is a very smart idea to move the part about the Saint Louis world fair from the section first organized backlash to the United States section. After reading that part I also realized that no backlash was mentioned so it did not make sense for that part to be under that section. Although the article was pretty well organized in the first place that edit helped improve the organization even if it was just a little bit. Under the modern exhibitions section there is mention of a safari then there is a section called human safari. The human safari section has one sentence so if feel that needs to either be added to or maybe combined with another section. Overall the article is very good there just needs to be a few edits. Good job and good edits!