User:Jsdento/Herodicus/Ancicco Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jsdento


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jsdento/Herodicus


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Herodicus

Evaluate the drafted changes
Recommendations for the live page: Reading the lead section of the article I understand the importance of Herodicus. He is considered the father of sports medicine. However, the “lead” section is the only section of the article, and even considering the small amount of information on the page, I feel the article could benefit from the information being broken into sections. For example, making his biographical information, his contributions, and his other accomplishment even outside of sports medicine their own sections. The live article describes Herodicus as a “sophist” which means he was relatively accomplished in many other fields. Perhaps finding some information on these other fields and his accomplishments there would add some depth to the article.

I also feel the article could benefit from the addition of more information in general. I feel there are at least a couple areas that could be expanded upon. Such as how he possibly tutored Hippocrates, what his “good diet” recommended, and the types of exercise he recommended and why he theorized these things would be beneficial. I am also curious if there is any information out there as to what diseases and conditions specifically, he thought good diet and exercise would treat.

The article is also sort of out of order sounding, with information feeling out of place in some spots. For example the last sentence detailing his walking recommendations. Why is that where it is? It could be placed with the other discussions of his diet and exercise recommendations.

Evaluation of proposed changes: At the time of review there is nothing in the Sandbox for this page.