User:Jstil0006/Gladys Lounsbury Hobby/Cameronobr1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jstil0006


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Gladys Lounsbury Hobby


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gladys Lounsbury Hobby

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

The lead paragraph is clear and concise, it wastes no words getting straight into the article, which I think is great, there is no fluff, so you get straight to the content you came to read about. The lead also portrays what the main point of the article is, however, it does not really list out what the main points would be, which I believe could be beneficial.

Content:

I think the content is one of the strongest points of this article, there are 9 sources, each utilized in their appropriate places. The content is pretty up to date as far as I can tell and it also contains relevant information. The only problem with this article is that it may be prone to content gaps. The majority of Hobby's work was done in a prejudice time in our country. This may lead to a lack of content and form a content gap around this article.

Tone and Balance:

The tone of this article is pretty neutral, from what I could see the sources are pretty solid and represent a pretty neutral view. The tone throughout the paper never really takes a particular side, which I see as a big success.

Sources and References:

The sources for this paper are very solid, some are current and some are older and it gives us a good mix on these, not trying to push us towards a certain viewpoint. Around half of the viewpoints come from underrepresented groups, which is a super strong point. I tried finding better sources through google scholar and jstor and honestly could not find any better. The sources do in fact reflect the article and also have working links. I enjoyed the in text links to other wiki pages too, I thought that was very helpful.

Organization:

The organization of this article is pretty solid, one thing I would suggest would be maybe trying to find more information on her early or late life, and trying to break down each section of her life into the corresponding sections.

Images and Media:

There are currently no images used in this article, I think adding an imagine or 2 could be very helpful for the articles power.

Overall Impressions:

The content in this users sandbox could help fill in a potential content gap left in this page. The strength of the content added helps boast about how important the articles subject is, and helps exemplify how easy it is to miss content due to content gaps. I think the content could be improved by simply adding more from distinct periods of the subjects life. Also adding an image could do wonders for this article.