User:Jsweav3/Gina Prince-Bythewood/Aperozo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

jsweav3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jsweav3/Gina_Prince-Bythewood?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gina Prince-Bythewood

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content: I think the content is appropriate and important. Prince-Bythewood has made important contributions to representations of Black people/women in film, and cinema in general. Also, 'Directorial Style and Reception' sections are common with other filmmakers.

Organization: The content is concise and well-written. The writing flows very well and there are no noticeable typos or mistakes.

Tone and Balance: I think that the tone for the draft skews a little bit towards the positive side (which I think is easy to fall into when talking about accomplished people), but I feel like it comes across that way due to lack of specificity on her public reception. I think being able to draw from more articles talking about Prince-Bythewood's impact would ground the section in fact and help it gain a more neutral tone. (I also see that you did include 'reception' as part of the section's title, so this criticism might be invalid because this is a first draft and there might be more you wanted to include but just didn't add.)

Sources: Continuing with the same thread from above, I feel like the section would benefit a lot from getting more sources about what others have written in reference to her work. However, the sources that are used for the draft so far are of good quality.

Overall: I think this is a nice addition to the article! It's well-written and it makes sense for the page. My only suggestion is to expand on the reception part of the section to further center it and make it feel more 'neutral'. Hope this was helpful!

P.S. You've likely already seen this, but she actually did a Closet Picks video with Criterion Collection recently! I find that type of video fun, and it was interesting to see her pulls from the collection. I'll attach the link in case haven't seen it and you'd like to :)

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=42NzYofW5eM&ab_channel=criterioncollection

Response to Peer Review (jsweav3)

Thank you for your feedback! It is very helpful; I will definitely be looking to expand on the reception section of the article to aid with the neutrality! - Jayden W.