User:Jtp wiki/Bakersfield sound/Parkerdaley Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Jessica Peters


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jtp%20wiki/Bakersfield_sound?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

All of the information here is relevant and well-supported by sources. Use of quotes seems targeted and substantial. Enough context is provided without being tangential. The only critique I have is that some of the information throughout comes across a bit like a storyline, rather than an encyclopedia entry. Perhaps making the language/tone more objective and less artistic?