User:JudyMiao/Open Smart City/Yiwang13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JudyMiao


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JudyMiao/Open_Smart_City?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello Judy:

You have a good start to the article! I really like the structure and information you include. The structure of your article is easy to follow, and you include several significant parts of Open Smart City. I made some detailed feedback about the article, and hope this is helpful.

Definition


 * "An open smart city is a city that integrates citizens and private sectors participating and collaborating with the public sector for fair and transparent governance for managing data to an open extent[1]." This sentence needs to be clarified. I sense that you try to include the significant points of the definition in one sentence, but it might be easier to understand by breaking those points into several sentences.
 * "Public data are open sources for citizens and the private sector to access, modify, and manage for a manual community's economic and socio-technical development[2]."What is the relationship between public data and open cities, and is public data part of open cities? More information may need to be included here or try to use clearer logic.
 * "The open smart city has been implemented with testing projects in most cities worldwide." There might need a clearer statistic, such as more than half or 80%.

Main Characteristics--Data


 * You clarify the importance of data management but need to explain what exactly the data related to Open City is. How are they created? Where are they from?
 * "...citizens have the right and responsibility to access and control their own data." What is the responsibility of citizens? I'm confused about how we can control our data.
 * Breaking down data, data management, and citizen obligations and rights into three separate sections may help the readers understand your article better.

Main Characteristics--Governance


 * This section is more like the data management mentioned in the "Data" section.
 * In addition to the technical field, do other fields, such as law and communication, influence the development of ethical standards?

Main Characteristics--Innovative Solution


 * What do you mean by "critical professionals" here? What are fields of expertise needed?

Main Characteristics--Participation & Collaboration


 * "Individuals equally participate in the community with similar duties and purposes for improving their life qualities and becoming more intelligent, effective, and convenient in a city (community)." It's challenging for me to understand this sentence. How can individuals participate?

Main Characteristics--Open-technology & System


 * What does Open-technology mean? It's better to include a short definition of open technology and system here.
 * Who is primarily responsible for this part? The individual, the private sector, or the government?

Main Characteristics---Co-construction and Sharing


 * What do you mean by "manually establishing" here? Or Which part needs to be manually established?

Main Characteristics---Overall


 * Overall, this section needs to be added with more information.
 * Some new terms need to be explained.
 * The classification of the content can be reorganized; the "Data" and "Governance" sections have some seemingly overlapping information.

Open Smart City Projects


 * Where is the Metaverse project located?
 * The logic between sentences could be improved

Limitations


 * The information in this section could be clearer. Are you trying to explain the limitations that personal data and privacy security create for open smart cities?
 * It feels like about half of the information is related to Metaverse. Can these two parts of the information be merged?
 * In addition to privacy and data security, open smart cities are supposed to have limitations in other aspects.