User:Jugem Jugem 1945/Ivan Yaeger/Ewalker05 Peer Review

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Jugem Jugem 1945/Ivan Yaeger
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Jugem Jugem 1945/Ivan Yaeger - Wikipedia
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You guys did a great job on your draft. You guys did a great job at having a clear and concise structure that is well organized and makes reading through it and gathering information very easy. You guys also did a great job at citing reliable sources after each sentence, which really helps the validity of each statement. One thing that really stood out to me that I never thought to add was the person's patents. I thought that this was a great idea and helps not only demonstrate his work but also why he is so notable. A couple minor tweaks I would suggest are avoiding words or phrases that don't feel neutral, such as taking out "nationally" in the lead section. I would also change "4" to "four." There is a great lead section that is easy to understand, a clear structure, and a lot of reliable sources cited. Great job at applying the five elements of a good Wikipedia article.