User:Jugem Jugem 1945/Ivan Yaeger/Michael248 Peer Review

General info
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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Michael248


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Jugem Jugem 1945/Ivan Yaeger
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead


 * I just look at my peer's article, so I don't think see any updates from him/her.
 * The article has the introductory sentence and a brief description of Ivan Yeager who is the founder and CEO of Yeager Foundation Inc.
 * The article include the brief description on each of the major's sections.
 * I don't think the Lead has information that is not present in this article.


 * This article is concise, the peer made this article a good brief sentence on each of the sections. The article was well organized, so it wouldn't be too much information.

Content


 * The content is relevant to the topic is the summary of the person that the peer made an article.
 * The content is not up-to-date.
 * I don't see anything this is missing or something that don't belong.

Tone and Balance


 * The content is added neutral because it's not positive or negative, but it's something that it is ok.
 * I'm not sure about the content added attempt to persuade them in one position or away from another.

Sources and Reference


 * I think all new content backed up a reliable recourses, because the article reference the source of the information.
 * Yes, it does reflect on what the cite say about Ivan Yeager who build his own company.


 * The Sources are thorough and reflect the available literature of the topic, it mainly mention about Yeager Foundation Inc.
 * I'm not sure if the source are current.
 * I don't know if the sources are written by diverse spectrum or authors. They also didn't include historical marginalized individuals, so I'm not sure.
 * There are a few better sources that came from the website.


 * The few links work.

Organization


 * Each of the contents are well-written, easy to read, and clear.
 * There are no grammatical or spelling errors in this article.
 * This article breaks down into sections to cover the major topics about Ivan Yeager and his life.

Overall Impression


 * This article seems to be improving that the peer is doing well with creating this article about Ivan Yeager.
 * Ivan Yeager created the artificial limbs to help the patients who had missing limbs. It's a good history about a man who build his own company to help his patient their loss of limbs.
 * I don't this article need improvement, so it's good.

This article is a good Wikipedia to learn about people who have roles as the inventor, scientist, and engineer. People are smart and hard work to make a difference with the world. This article is about a man who build his own Company called Yaeger Company, his business is to build the artificial lambs like the arm for a girl as an example.