User:Jugem Jugem 1945/Kandis Leslie Abdul-Aziz/Dreamfar94488 Peer Review

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CherryJake, GrgNd, Nicholas Rondan
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:GrgNd/Kandis Leslie Abdul-Aziz/Bibliography:User:GrgNd/Kandis Leslie Abdul-Aziz
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Beautifully drafted Bibliography that definitely created a strong support for this article. Overall well balance in a neutral tone due to the vast resources.

Lead

 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? I think the lead is great, maybe just add a small summary of what work she's known for? Since that's what makes her notable.

Content

 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? Early Life and Education: I see no early life, only education. Maybe remove the early life from the title or add info about early life.
 * “Following this, she worked as a chemist specializing in forensic science at the Philadelphia Police Department from 2009 to 2011” I would not consider this early life or education.
 * “Kandis Leslie Abdul-Aziz attained her Bachelor’s in Chemistry in 2007” where did she get her Bachelors?

Tone and Balance

 * Is the content added neutral? Everything is well written in a very neutral tone, I wasn't able to pick up on any bias sounding tones or words.

Sources and References

 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? A very thorough amount of resources
 * Check a few links. Do they work?  All of the links work!

Organization

 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? "Abdul-Aziz secured a role testing the refinery's waste-water, and examining refined petroleum goods such as phenol and acetone, which could potentially be bought by manufacturing industries, at an oil refinery located near Schuylkill River in South Philadelphia, shortly after obtaining a Bachelor's in Chemistry in 2007. Abdul-Aziz later worked for the Philadelphia Police Department as a chemist specializing in forensic science from 2009-2011". This sentence reads a bit awkwardly, maybe removing “which could potentially be bought by manufacturing industries” would help or just restructuring.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? “Notably, her development of c for direct methanation” What is c?