User:Jugem Jugem 1945/Kandis Leslie Abdul-Aziz/Stevenw9909 Peer Review

General info
CherryJake, GrgNd, Nicholas Rondan
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:GrgNd/Kandis Leslie Abdul-Aziz - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * The lead very briefly explains career but doesn't mention her education, maybe include a little snippit of that.
 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - The lead has some contradictory statements such as stating that she works for riverside now but before working for USC she worked for Riverside.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? -Yes, great number of sources and very well written career section.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? - Yes, articles are on the newer side of things.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? - Just that bit of where she is working currently versus past employment confuses me.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? - Yes, a female academic of color with a prominent position at multiple universities.

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral? - Mostly, the last paragraph uses terms such as pivotal and notably which could be seen as a bias.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? - Her employment and study of Sustainable catalysts is a heavy portion of the article. Adding in education and some personal facts could help alleviate the focus on career.

Sources and References


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? - Most sentences include a citation and if they don't, the following sentence does.


 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? /Is at least one of them a source from class reading or the "suggested sources" list?- The sources include a lot of information but lacks some personal information.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? - From the looks of it, most of the articles are written by educational parties but still provide excellent info.

Overall impressions


 * I think it's a good start but could use some more information. Don't forget to edit out the bottom sections titled article draft, lead, and article body. The reference list looks great but might need one personal source to reference her personal life.

-Steven