User:Jugem Jugem 1945/Kat Calvin/NickOden Peer Review

General info
(provide username)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

DFloresVVC, Crystat8462, Ewalker05, Anahi.0812


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:DFloresVVC/Kat Calvin:User:DFloresVVC/Kat Calvin/Bibliography
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):User:DFloresVVC/Kat Calvin:User:DFloresVVC/Kat Calvin/Bibliography

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Introduction

 * The citation placements I think are perfect for the introduction
 * I believe a little more information can be found and given for this Wiki introduction
 * I recommend going online to other big lawyers Wikipedia pages and trying to make the introduction similar to there's.
 * This article does not let the reader know about what the contents will be about but does give information on Calvin's profession

Early Life and Education

 * The sentence talking about his parents can be written differently
 * The content talks about her education as well
 * With content added in this segment the information is up to date
 * For this segment of the article the information is on topic
 * I don't know how much information is available to the crew but getting more information on her childhood- college life would be best.

Career and Research

 * The content in this segment looks to be up to date on information that is given. With further research more information can be found I feel.
 * I feel like more content can be added to this segment from the sources that have been found
 * The content gathered is related to the topic
 * The tone feels neutral with how much information is gathered.
 * This content does not seem to have any bias or want to convince of anything

Organization

 * I feel like a lot of information in this segment could have been written better with more information added. Though I believe this article is a really good start to something very informational
 * I am very bad when it comes to Grammar errors so I am not the one to talk about this, If anything segments feel choppy with all the periods