User:Julianloll/Baojuan/Bokchoychoy Peer Review

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 * User:Julianloll/Baojuan


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 * Baojuan

Lead
The information added to the lead section is extremely useful. Its nature as a devalued commoner's art is immediately apparent in these edits, something the original neglects to touch on despite that being a very important distinction.

Content
The content of these edits is appropriate and matches the original article's content while also providing further information. The new information makes sense, especially the revelation that early baojuan literature of the 13-15th centuries was Buddhist propaganda. Given that the original article claims baojuan was in a vernacular and not in classical Chinese, this meshes with the Song Dynasty print literature boom, the renovation of the Grand Canal, and wider spread of Buddhism amongst more common folk.

The editor has included some marvelous information on the origins of the baojuan genre and scholarly study on it which were all but missing in the original article.

The nature of baojuan as a commoner's form of moralizing entertainment addresses a class divide related knowledge gap that persists in Chinese studies. This knowledge gap is likely a large reason why the original article is so short.

Tone and Balance
Wording and language in these edits is appropriately neutral. There are no attempts made to persuade the reader and no particular viewpoints seem to be prioritized.

Sources and References
All of the sources are from scholarly publications like university presses or research non-profit journals. The sources given are all very current, with the earliest being from 2013 and the most recent being from 2019. It seems scholars have given baojuan fairly little attention until recent years, so the additions to the article on the editor's part will be very well timed. All of the links work. Where I could access the texts, the claims made in the edits are congruent with claims in the sources with no plagiarism I could detect.

Organization
These edits are easy to understand, though there are a few awkward sentences that could be easily improved. It is clear which sections of the article the paragraphs of the edit would fit into, and they would fit in neatly.

Images and Media
No images or media have been added as of yet, but I can imagine this would be a difficult topic to find a suitable image for.

Overall Impressions
These edits certainly give a greater picture of the nature of baojuan and enrich the knowledge already within the article and will more than double its length. The edits help fill an equity gap, provide more historically and culturally relevant background on baojuan, and would help someone unfamiliar with Chinese history understand the phenomenon more. Any tweaks to grammar will be simple. I can imagine this was a difficult topic to undertake given its rather specialized nature, but it has been handled responsibly.