User:Julianneteres/Jae sae sung oh/Alicecarlst Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Julianneteres


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Julianneteres/Jae_sae_sung_oh?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead is unbiased and concise. There is an introductory sentence that summarizes the article well.

Content: The content is up to date and thorough. The furniture design category appears to be missing some information. The content does deal with an equity gap.

Tone and Balance: The content is mostly neutral. Some of the sentences sound a little too much like advertisements though; saying she strives to make objects out of plastic feels more subjective than just saying that she makes objects out of plastic for example.

Bibliography:

The bibliography is currently missing from this page.

General:

The article is neutral and feels relevant. There are a few spelling/ grammar issues in the article. Some of the sentences are not full sentences and a few words are spelled incorrectly.

The main things that should be worked on are just grammar and adding in citations and making sure the tone sounds neutral at all times.