User:Juliettelm/Skims/IsabellaCarufel Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Juliettelm


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Juliettelm/Skims?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Kim Kardashian

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Juliette!

I really like how you took a section from the Kim K article and decided to make it into its own one, SKIMS has had a lot of media presence within the past couple years (and I also like their products).

- I love that SKIMs will now have its own wikipedia page

- writing is a neutral tone

- Good start on the lead and history section

- good citations

- good grammar

- clear writing and easy to read

Here are some notes I have on content that could fill some gaps within your articles (I added the suggestions to your article so they make sense in organization but feel free to remove!):

- Expand the history/ background especially concerning the Kimono controversy

- For collaborations each collab USA/Fendi/ etc can have its own section about when the collab started, when it was started/ media reception

- Media reception of the brand after relaunching could also be interesting to look into

- Adding a section for branding/ marketing because they have a lot of influencer promotion

- Infobox as more topics are added

Overall I’ve enjoyed reading what you have written so far! I can’t wait to see the finished product. Feel free to reach out with any questions, comments, concerns!