User:Juliewagoner12/Sidney Bechet/Pcharlotte Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Juliewagoner12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Juliewagoner12/Sidney_Bechet?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sidney Bechet

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: There is no addition to the lead in the sandbox so I am basing this off the main article. The lead is short, which is good, but I think it could contain more relevant information. For example, it doesn't mention that he spent the end of his life in France.

Content: I think creating sub-headings was a great idea because it makes the article a lot easier to read and find relevant information. More could be added to the Personal Life section, for example whether or not he was married/had children/etc. Maybe in the Musical Development section you could add a recording of one of his songs (if that's possible to do). The quote formatting is different in the Later Life and Autobiography & Death sections.

This is just a suggestion, but I'm not sure if the information about his autobiography is relevant enough to warrant its own sub-section. Perhaps the information about his death could go under Permanent Settlement in Paris and the autobiography could be added to Personal Life. Especially since its addition seems to be used to provide insight into his personality.

Post-Death Developments could maybe be named Legacy (at least that is what I've seen used on other Wikipedia pages).

Tone and Balance: Yes, the content is neutral and does not seem biased in any direction.

Sources and References: Based on the IMDB link it looks like his music was used in several recent films, that might be an interesting point to add to the body of the article. The content seems to be well cited and the links that I checked work.

Images and Media: As mentioned previously, it would be nice to add a clip or two of his songs, if that is possible. The addition of photos is good and show two different periods of his life. One small note is that the photos of Bechet are captioned in two different styles, the year is in parentheses in one and not the other.