User:Julisadeleon/Muted group theory/Red racer736 Peer Review

General info
Julisadeleon
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Julisadeleon/Muted group theory - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Muted group theory - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I can't really tell what has been updated in the lead section of your sandbox, but from what I read it all sounds pretty good and its well written, as well as how it's organized in sections which is a great way to go about it.My initial thought when I read through your sandbox is that it feels a little empty in terms of edits that were made the only area where I can tell where an obvious edit was made was in the section titled "Assumption #3" I will say however those couple of sentences you added are really good, I just feel as if you need more of those throughout your sandbox

I am also unsure if everything written in the section titled "This theory posits that every culture has dominant and subordinate groups." is an edit or something new that you plan to add to the Wikipedia because I could not find any of it in the original article. Regardless of if it is an edit or not what is written there is pretty solid all you need is a source for it since I didn't spot one on the Wikipedia article.

I think personally with what's in your article I think it's all good there is some solid information and it's a great base for a rough draft, but I think you need more I don't think there's enough here you've done to edit the article to improve it from what it once was already.

I'm not sure what you could add to the article but if you could find a way to add a new section to the article, I think that would give it that depth that your sandbox needs. But aside from that overall, your sandbox is good I don't spot any grammatical errors its organized well and the sources that you do have are up to date and accurate.

Keep up the good work!