User:JumpOffsides/Peisistratos/LieutenantKennedy17 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:JumpOffsides


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JumpOffsides/Peisistratos?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Peisistratos

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The updates to the lead section were helpful and provided a useful general summary of the information about Peisistratos’ life, which is later discussed in the article.

Clarity of Article Structure:  The sections are organized in a sensible order and provide a good flow for the article. The separation of his tyrannical rules and the policies and other achievements was a good addition as well.

Coverage Balance: Overall, each section in this article is thoroughly covered and the important sections have plenty of information that shows their significance. There were a few sections, however, that may have included more information than necessary. The ones that stood out the most were the “Background and rise,” “Achievements and contributions to Athens during 3rd and final tyranny,” “Domestic policies,” and “Legacy.” The information in these sections were great, but at times seemed unrelated to Peisistratos. Is there a way to summarize or shorten some of these paragraphs so that they are more focused on Peisistratos? It might be helpful to break some of the paragraphs up as well so that there is not large sections of text to read through  The additional pictures added were good and necessary for the content.

Content Neutrality: The updated article provides multiple views, perspectives, and theories regarding Peisistratos, which helped create a more complete and neutral explanation of his life and actions. The article did not favor one side over another.

Sources: This article has a mixture of primary and secondary sources which help make the information more reliable. There were many references to good sources which contributed to the well-rounded description of Peisistratos.