User:Jushe1234/Layered intrusion/Yaatch Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jushe1234


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jushe1234/Layered_intrusion?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Layered intrusion

Evaluate the drafted changes
Jushe1234 added a subsection titled "Economic Mineral Occurences", where there's a short description of the types of minerals and resources that are associated with layered intrusions. The lead section was not updated to reflect the new content, although it contains one fragment that refers to it: "Orebodies of platinum group elements, chromite, magnetite, and ilmenite are often associated with these rare intrusions". One good aspect of the references is that most are recent or from the last 10-15 years.

The content added is relevant to the topic, is up-to-date and adds new information to the existing article. One problem is that the description of the ore deposits associated with layered intrusions is overly focused on the mineralogy. No concrete examples are provided and there is a lack of connection with the already existing subsection "Examples". Jushe1234 also refers to ongoing discussions on the genesis of PGE ores (" Whether or not there is a direct relationship between igneous and country rock-hosted magmatic sulfides is still a debated topic". Wouldn't this fragment be better suited to the section "Causes of Layering"? On the other hand, the text is balanced and does not try to convince the reader that a specific point of view is correct.

As for the sources, the article does a good job in summarizing several articles. All sources are from peer-reviewed journals, which is an indication that the author was thorough when selecting the bibliography. To improve this aspect, I would suggest the author to search for a recent review on the topic, in order to be sure that the sources used reflect the main points of view on the subject.

The added subsection does not include any images. One suggestion would be to include a World Map containing the locations of the main ore bodies being prospected currently that are related to the topic.

Overall, the section improves the quality of the article, but it is necessary to better integrate the new content to the existing one. Currently, the new mineralogical description of the typical ore bodies related to layered intrusions does not connect with the "Examples" section. Also, editing the "Lead Section" to better reflect the new content would be a good improvement.