User:JustBort/Innokenty Annensky/Applesandbanana Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JustBort


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:JustBort/Innokenty_Annensky&veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&redirect=no


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The sandbox contained edited versions of the lead, biography, assessment, and references. Within the lead section, the user added bits and pieces of new information throughout the lead. One of these included adding onto the last sentence of the original wikipedia page. Although the edit did allow me to have a clearer understanding of what the writer wanted to say, I personally felt as if the sentence was being stretched and would've split the sentence. Overall, I think the lead gives a solid background into who Annensky is. Another section that the author worked on was the last paragraph of the biography. Something that stood out to me was the sentence " His second book, Cypress Box, was much more important." This sentence comes off as an opinion and there wasn't any citations of footnotes that followed it. It would be nice if know where the statement came from. Overall, I think that the edits made the article stronger as a whole. The Poetic Assessment brought a lot of new information to the article with its respective references. There are also many linked articles found throughout the article that connects and ties the article to others. I thought that that was a really nice touch as I didn't think incorporate it when editing my own article.