User:JusttheletterE/Bilbo's rain frog/Koafve Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JusttheletterE - "Bilbo's rain frog"


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JusttheletterE/Bilbo's_rain_frog?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bilbo's rain frog

Evaluate the drafted changes
NOTE: SP = spelling, GR = grammar

General review:

- I suggest making sure all information claims have more than one or two sources. This is to avoid your claims being underrepresented!

- Your lead should include a brief description of the articles sections (behavior habitat, etc...).

- Could you add more to the "distribution, habitat, and ecology" section? It may be a good idea to include more information on what exactly their habitat is physically like (temperature, etc...).

- I really like how you've split up the "behavior" section! It makes it very clear to follow and understand.

- In the "sexual behavior" section it may be a good idea to format it temporally. By this I mean explaining mating calls first, then mate choice/selection, followed by the actual process of mating. This may help aid in someones understanding. You may have to find more sources for this. If you want to go in further detail, you could even explore comparing this to other related frog species.

- Can you expand more in the "feeding behavior and diet" section? You mention that this frog is an insectivore, could you include what insects they typically eat? Any differences between the sexes?

- I'm wondering if it may be a good idea to find and include more peer reviewed articles for your sources. Information found in more sources may help give your additions more credibility! Generally, what I do when searching for more sources on a specific topic is look at the sources on my previously found sources, almost like a paper trail.

- The tone of your article is great! In no way did I feel like you were trying to persuade me in one way with your editions, nor did it seem like the article was biased.

Detailed review:

- These sentences could be worded better;

"The species is threatened by habitat loss, construction, maintenance of roads, sylviculture***(SP), general habitat degregation***(SP), and by road traffic. As a result it is listed as Near Threatened in the IUCN Red List of Threatened Species."

For example, habitat loss can include both general habitat degradation and construction. It is redundant to mention those examples outside of just listing habitat loss.

- "As all species from Brevicipitidae, Breviceps bagginsi lack sphenethmoids.***(GR) and a middle ear"

- "Unlike other frogs, Breviceps..." ***(GR) I added a comma!

- "Much like other the members of Breviceps, Breviceps bagginsi" ***(GR) I added a comma!

- "When threatened, Breviceps inflate themselves to appear larger and more threatening." ***(GR) I added a comma and a period.

- "The frog was named after Bilbo Baggins, the main character from The Hobbit by J.R.R Tolkien. The frog was named as such, because the scientist who discovered it (L.R Minter) used to read the novel to his children." What's your source for this information?

Good job!