User:Jwiggler/Semipermeable membrane/Smbiophysics Peer Review

General info
Jwiggler
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jwiggler/Semipermeable membrane
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Semipermeable membrane

Evaluate the drafted changes
Notes on your ideas for article changes:

-Thoughts about additions of hemodialysis and antibiotics seem like relevant sections to add in terms of medical relations (as applications/relevance is missing from the current article), however I would avoid diving too deep into these additions as they could turn into tangents.

Notes on the article itself:

-In the first sentence "Semipermeable membrane is a type of biological or synthetic, polymeric membrane that will allow certain molecules or ions to pass through it by osmosis", you could reword the "that will allow" to sound better. Additionally, I'm not sure if you need to put biological or synthetic membrane here, because that pretty much classifies all membranes. The biological vs. synthetic sections could be broken down later, but is too general of a statement to be made in the intro sentence without immediate clarification.

-The following sentence about rate could be placed in a later section, as it seems too specific for the beginning of the article. You could put some information about the importance of these membranes here, or different examples of membranes to clear up the biological vs. synthetic.

-"One example of this is the thin film on the inside of the egg." What egg?

-With this sentence "Biological membranes are selectively permeable, with the passage of molecules controlled by facilitated diffusion, passive transport or active transport regulated by proteins embedded in the membrane." You could clarify this, by emphasizing that selectively permeable is different from semipermeable (and not just a subclass).

-The biological membranes section is pretty choppy, three sentences start with "The" in a row, and the first two sentences could be made more concise. Explanation of the membrane seems overrepresented, as this should be focusing more on what makes semipermeable membranes unique from normal membranes.

-Cellular communication section introduces GPCR, but doesn't explain how it relates to signaling very well.

-Reverse osmosis section reads well, but is a bit long, and the end sentence that introduces dialysis tubing should be put in another section with its own explanation (which it seems like you're already planning on doing).

-Citations seem sufficient, but maybe a couple could be added in the biological membranes section and Reverse Osmosis Section.

-Overall, the article already reads with a neutral, scientific tone, so I would try to match that same tone found throughout.

-Links work out, but Study.com is not a reputable source. You could find a scientific article that provides this same information to replace it.