User:Jxl1734/Operation Peter Pan/CCEagle17 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

jxl1734


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jxl1734/Operation Peter Pan


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Operation Peter Pan

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

 * Lead paragraph has been edited to be very concise, but get the point of the article across.
 * Great organizing edits made to the first two paragraphs to get the point across with less words and confusing language.

Content

 * Content is good. Gaps were filled into the article that were not before. New sources involved in the new article allowing for more information to be put into the article.
 * Good job contextualizing briefly and giving the link to the Cuban revolution in the new section you created
 * I really liked the dismantling of the Program developed section to be able to expand greater into the actual steps taken in the operation.
 * Conflicting Narratives section is great for broadening the lense of views.

Tone and Balance

 * The tone is very well balanced. The original article had some bias in its tone, but after the edits made there is a much more balanced tone to the article. The changes made were beneficial because not only did the tone balance out, but the paragraphs became more concise.

Sources and References

 * Only one source is a little outdated, but that isn't an issue based on what it was used for.
 * Overall the sources are good, the only recommendation i would make is to branch out from Shnookal if possible. Finding sources other than her can help balance out more of the article if there are many different perspectives and or studies on the topic in regards to its Success.
 * You may need a source on the third paragraph of parental fears section.

Organization

 * I said it earlier, but the edits made to the article really did help the organization of it. Paragraphs were shortened that were too wordy and sentence structure was changed to make it a much easier read than before. Really good job on this part.

Overall impressions

 * Really impressed with this article. Information was really good, the topic was super interesting, and the edits to the organization of the article made it that much better.
 * the new sections you created made the article much more informative and balanced.
 * The only thing that you could do more of is to find other sources if possible.