User:K1arraSFSU/Go Ichinose/DeLandNebbb Peer Review

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First of all the article is very well made the lead is very clear and the rest of the article is concise. I really like the additions of the pages of the composer's works. The lead is a lead it states who he is what he does so thats pretty good. Also are you gonna add a info box it could be pretty good. The orginazation is pretty good and I like the sections with his life and then what he does. Evrything is in chronological order so that's good. As much as I use like I don't think I like it in your article I don't know I think it creates a conclusion and that's not good maybe you could use other words than like or dislike and it seems like there is only one perspective but its probably the only one that was avalible to you but just try making the history part more neutral but other than that it is a pretty good article. I know it was probably hard finding sources for this guy but you did pretty well I think these are reliable and they seem like good sites and the balance of source usage throughout the article is pretty good. Right now everything is pretty good the important thing now is to try make it neutral.