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Article Evaluation for Annie Abernethie Pirie Quibell

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Early Life and Training

Annie Abernathie Pirie Quibell was born in 1862 in Scotland. Her father was minister and Principal at the University of Aberdeen. As a young woman, she originally trained as an artist and her work was exhibited at the Royal Scottish Academy. She was one of Flinders Petrie's earliest students at University College London in the 1890s, which at the time was the only university in the UK to allow women to take degrees. She would have been in the classroom with Margaret Alice Murray, and likely taught by Francis Griffith.

Early Career

In 1895, Abernathie was chosen by Petrie to join his field team in Egypt at Saqqara and the Ramesseum, Thebes. She went to work as a copyist with another artist Rosalind Frances Emily Paget. At Saqqara they worked in the Fifth Dynasty tomb of Ptahhotep. Their work can be seen at the Griffith Institute of Egyptology at Oxford University. She was a part of the excavation team at El Kab in 1897, and Hierakonpolis the following year and continued working on excavations in Egypt with her new husband, James Edward Quibell, whom she married in 1900. They first fell in love in their first season (1895) while both suffering from a bout of ptomaine poisoning while on excavation, and ultimately worked together at Saqqara for eight years from 1905 to 1914 Here, she copied the wall paintings at the tomb of Hesrya and the 6th century monastery of Apa Jeremias. During their time in Saqqara, they lived in Mariette's house, which was on site until TK.

Quibell and her husband worked on the Egyptian exhibit for the 1904 St. Louis World's Fair.

Her illustrations of archaeological finds were featured in archaeological reports on Saqqara, the Ramesseum and Hierakonpolis. Annie Quibell was also an author in her own right. Her first publication was an English translation of the Guide to the Cairo Museum in 1906, done in conjunction with her husband. She produced short guides to the Pyramids at Giza and the Saqqara tombs which were originally published in Cairo. In the 1920s, she published two further books, Egyptian History and Art (1923), and A Wayfarer in Egypt (1925). After her return to Britain, she worked on arranging the Egyptian gallery at the Marischal Museum at Aberdeen University. Annie Pirie Quibell died in England in 1927 of leukaemia. Her archaeological drawings are still used by researchers and students, and can be viewed at the Ancient Egypt Rediscovered Gallery of the National Museum of Scotland.

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 * Maspero, Gaston C. C, James E. Quibell, and Annie A. Quibell. Guide to the Cairo Museum. Cairo: Printing Office of the French Institute of Oriental Archaeology, 1910.
 * Quibell, Annie A. The Pyramids of Giza. Cairo: CMS Bookshop, 1915
 * Quibell, A. A. 1925. The Tombs of Sakkara. 2nd edn. Cairo: Church Missionary Society.

Quibell and her husband worked on the Egyptian exhibit for the 1904 St. Louis World's Fair. https://chroniclingamerica.loc.gov/lccn/sn84020274/1904-03-06/ed-1/seq-17/ The St. Louis Republic. [volume], March 06, 1904, PART II, Page 5, Image 17

Article additions for Theodore M. Davis
But by 1913, Davis had become disillusioned with the efforts that had not yielded an intact royal tomb, and began to share the belief that the valley had been exhausted. During the 1913-14 season he finally gave up the concession to excavate in the Valley of the Kings.

By 1913, Davis was convinced that either KV 54, the Tutankhamun embalming cache, or KV 57, Horemheb's tomb, were in fact the tomb of King Tutankhamun. In the 1912 site report, The Tombs of Harmhabi and Touatânkhamanou, which was about the finds from the 1908 season, he stated “I fear the Valley of the Tombs is now exhausted.”

additions for 6 November 2020
In Luxor, fellow Rhode Islander Charles Wilbour introduced Davis and Andrews to antiquities dealer Mohammad Mohassib on their first trip up the Nile in 1890. Wilbour had bought from Mohassib for years, and he became a trusted dealer for Davis and Andrews. Many people bought a number of important pieces from him over the years. [CITE John M. Adams p. 171].

Article draft additions Ida A. Bengtson
I'm going to reorganize the article, and add section breaks: Early Life, Education, Career (with subsections: NIH, Trachoma, Botulinum toxin, neurotoxins), and death.

The sub-section I will add:

Trachoma
Based on her work with the US Public Health Service (USPHS), now the NIH, she was moved to Rolla, Missouri, to begin to investigate the trachoma pandemic that was particularly widespread in the region of Alabama, Missouri, Tennessee, and Oklahoma. She arrived in Rolla in 1924 and took her place in the biology lab at the Missouri School of Mines (MSM, now Missouri S&T), in the basement of Parker Hall.

Bengtson ran the trachoma hospital in Rolla, one of only 4 in the country at the time. It was in a small, wood framed house on Elm Street, but it soon was too small to serve all the people who needed treatment. After Bengtson left Rolla in 1931, a new trachoma hospital was built in 1939, and today houses the Rock Mechanics and Explosives Research Center on S&T's campus.

During her short time in Rolla, Bengtson worked with animals and over 1500 human patients to isolate the bacteria causing the debilitating disease. She slowed the progression of the disease in over 1000 people, and, according to The Kansas City Star, Bengtson “made Rolla the chief American battle front in the war on” trachoma.

Cite throughout, but also

Later life: During that typhus work she found an effective vaccine for the tick-borne Rocky Mountain spotted fever. She retired in 1946.

Sources for this section:

Howard Markel “The Eyes Have It”: Trachoma, the Perception of Disease, the United States Public Health Service, and the American Jewish Immigration Experience, 1897-1924 (2000)," Bulletin of the history of medicine 2000, vol 74, pp 525-560.

New Article Muhammad Mohassib
Muhammad Mohassib (1843-1928) was an Egyptian antiquities dealer in Luxor, Egypt. He began working as a young donkey boy to Lucie, Lady Duff-Gordon and learned English from her. He opened an antiquities shop in Luxor in the early 1880s and became well-known among especially British and French archaeologists and dealers. A lot of important collections in museums in Europe and the US were partly bought from Mohassib.

Americans Theodore Davis and Emma Andrews bought from him the entire time they were traveling through Egypt (1889-1913). E._A._Wallis_Budge of the British Museum corresponded with Mohassib, who would regularly arrange to purchase items from him. As with any antiquities dealers in this period, Mohassib frequently sold items stolen from excavations around Luxor, and Davis and Andrews were reasonably certain they regularly bought back items from their own sites. Because of this, it is difficult to ascertain the provenance of many items coming from his shop.

See Newberry, JEA 14 (1928), p. 184. Budge, Nile & Tigris 138-9, 143, 45, 50.

Article draft additions
Tomb of Perneb

March 8
The tomb was erected during the 5th dynasty in the Old Kingdom. It was discovered in 1907, purchased from the Egyptian government in 1913 and given to the Metropolitan Museum of Art in New York City, New York, United States of America, by Edward S. Harkness.

Exhibit at the Metropolitan Museum of Art
Since the 1910s, the tomb has been on display at the Metropolitan Museum of Art. As of 2015, it is at the entrance to the museum's collection of Egyptian art. Visitors can enter the tomb and walk through its rooms. Some of the internal hieroglyphics have been translated into English.

In its original location, there were two small obelisks at the western corners of the courtyard, honoring the sun god Re. These are no longer part of the museum exhibit.

Additions: The tomb was dismantled in 1913 by Albert Lythgoe and Ambrose Lansing, with the help of countless Egyptian workers. It was brought to the US from Saqqara that year, where it was reassembled at the MMA, in Gallery D4. Since 1916, the tomb has been on display to the public.

As of 2018, it is at the entrance to the museum's collection of Egyptian art. Visitors can enter the tomb and walk through its rooms. Some of the internal hieroglyphics have been translated into English.

In its original location, there were two small obelisks at the western corners of the courtyard, honoring the sun god Re. These are no longer part of the museum exhibit.

additions March 2020
The tomb was opened to the public on 3 February 1916 to what Ransom called "great éclat." She wrote to her colleague James Breasted that "People were formed in line two abreast all the way back to the Fifth avenue entrance to get into the chambers. Glass positions electrically lighted illustrate the former position and the taking down of the tomb. There are two cases of the objects found in the course of the excavations including the greater part of Perneb’s skull. A model of the entire tomb makes clear the position of the burial chamber."

She wrote a handbook about the tomb, geared toward the general public and visitors to the exhibition, The Tomb of Perneb, with Illustrations.

Review by K8shep (talk) 16:09, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
1. What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? Your article presents some good stuff. You said this, from this source. And you're adding this info, which was missing and is useful.

2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? You should probably be more specific about what you're adding, because you haven't been specific about that.

3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? You could improve the article more by looking for a few more sources. I wonder about X? Did you find anything about that? Maybe add a sentence about X after the one about W.

I agree that I need to do X, because.... I don't think I'm going to change Y, mainly because....

Early years and betrothals
Beatrice was born in Coimbra, during the brief siege of the city by Castilian troops during the second Fernandine War (1372–73). The siege was lifted and King Henry II of Castile continued to Santarém and then Lisbon. During the siege of Lisbon, Cardinal legate Guido of Bologna obtained an agreement between the Kings of Castile and Portugal, the Peace of Santarém. According to that treaty, King Ferdinand I of Portugal would abandon the 'Petrist' cause, his claim to dynastic legitimacy that originated after the assassination of King Peter I of Castile in 1369. Two marriages were celebrated between the two royal families to reinforce the peace: between Sancho Alfonso, 1st Count of Alburquerque, brother of Henry, and Beatrice, half-sister of Ferdinand, and between Alfonso Enríquez, Henry's natural son, and Ferdinand's illegitimate daughter Isabel. In addition, a betrothal was arranged between Beatrice, Ferdinand I of Portugal's newborn daughter, and Fadrique, created Duke of Benavente, another natural son of King Henry II of Castile.

Article Evaluation
Ida_A._Bengtson Everything was relevant to her career and life. There isn't anything that was distracting, but there is a large chunk of her life that is missing. What did she do between 1917-1935?
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I didn't see anything that was biased necessarily, but it was mostly about her work with anaerobic bacteria. It leaves me wondering if there was anything else she did.
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The only section is "Life" but there are a number of other areas of her life that could be separated out. She had a career, and maybe there should be a few other sections, like "Education," "Work at the NIH", "Publications" or something like that.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

The citations are all legitimate and they look reliable, but there's one in German. There must be more sources on her work and life. What about a publication of hers to show some of her work?
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The sources are all reliable and neutral. There should be more of them, though, to put her work and life in context. Again, there's no bias, really, but most of the articles focus on her anaerobic stuff and not much on her work between 1917-1935.
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There is a chunk of her life, basically from 1920-36 that isn't covered. What did she do? Where was she? Oh look: https://thenewinquiry.com/blog/selective-blindness-ida-bengtson-and-the-treatment-of-trachoma/
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People haven't been updating this since really 2018. Not a lot of talk on her page, but she is important. I would like to start a conversation about her work on Trachoma, so I did [] (and see above link).
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It is a start class, but low- to mid-importance. Because of some sources I've found, she seems a lot more important than Wiki editors might know.
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As for women, she is shown as working in a lab and making discoveries. We know that women definitely did this, but their work was undervalued, much like Wikipedia is doing now. K8shep (talk) 15:07, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
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Article draft
We are editing in X sandbox. I am editing Aztec calendar

Here are things that should be added, that I want to add, and some sources.
 * 1) Clearly needs more in-text citations
 * 2) How does this compare/contrast to other calendars like the Maya one?
 * 3) Maybe talk about how we know all of this--it comes straight from Spanish sources

Article notes
here are some notes about things

I am making article notes here lalalala

Original Aztec calendar Edits
Making a new section called

Trecenas
The 260 days of the sacred calendar were grouped into twenty periods of thirteen days each. Scholars usually refer to these thirteen-day "weeks" as trecenas, using a Spanish term derived from trece "thirteen" (just as the Spanish term docena "dozen" is derived from doce "twelve"). The original Nahuatl term is not known.

Each trecena is named according to the calendar date of the first day of the thirteen days in that trecena. In addition, each of the twenty trecenas in the 260-day cycle had its own tutelary deity

Sources of Information on Aztec Calendar
Here is where I'll talk about how we have some Spanish conquest sources for the Aztec Calendar, which ones, where are they found, who wrote them and when. I'll then copy and paste this into the article. This isn't just my outline, but it is original text that I have, in fact, written myself, cited, and am hoping to add to the article I referenced above. It is ready for peer edit, constructive criticism.

Good job on XYZ but what about this source?K8shep (talk) 16:07, 16 October 2017 (UTC) I copyedited K8shep (talk) 16:09, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer Edit by K8shep (talk) 13:21, 18 October 2017 (UTC)
I've looked at this--cool! K8shep (talk) 16:03, 12 February 2018 (UTC)
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 * 4) I'm glad you had N in your article because I had thought about doing that but I wasn't sure.  Now I will!

Citation testing
this is what I'm citing. Instructor page and account. I'm working in a word doc.

This is my Instructor Page

Environmental History (Latin America) [as this isn't going to be a new page by itself, it doesn't need a lead, right?]

Lead paragraph (with links and sources)

This is my sandbox. Can other people see this?K8shep (talk) 17:56, 25 September 2017 (UTC)