User:KBfade24/Oncorhynchus kawamurae/JackJiangZZ Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:KBfade24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:KBfade24/Oncorhynchus kawamurae
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Oncorhynchus kawamurae

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Good to involve new content about the oncorhynchus kawamurae and the lead include a concise introduction of the topic.
 * Everything mentioned involved in this part were included in the article.
 * The lead introduce different information about the oncorhynchus kawamurae, however, there is no a content box to clarify the major sections of the article.

Content


 * The content added is relevant to the topic and most of references study are from nearly 10 years before, so it is hard to say the content is up-to-data.
 * The content was close related to the article.

Tone and Balance


 * The content is added neutral and organized.
 * The claims are not heavily biased toward a particular position, and the viewpoints have balance represented.

Sources and References


 * The new content are supported by reliable secondary source, and some of them are journal articles.
 * But the limitation is that the source are not from recent 5 years.
 * I click some links, and they work well.

Organization


 * The added content is concise and clear.
 * It is suggested to use some sub-title to break down into more specifics section.

Images and Media


 * This version has not used pictures or media for the time being

Overall impressions


 * The added content improve the article’s degree of complete, and brings a lot of new information.
 * The strength is that the article is very concise and informative, the lead section attract me as Oncorhynchus kawamurae was considered extinct, and it was rediscovered. It is a good “hook” to introduce the history of this species. It is also what I learned from the article.
 * There is a few typo and grammatical issues could be fixed to make the sentence clear. It is better to add link or citation for some sentence, for example ”Spawning occurs in deep depths of 30 to 40 meters during winter and spring and during this time their physiology tends to change.”.