User:KCterm/Gender inequality in China/Wrig36 Peer Review

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Lead/intro:  You state that the one-child policy in China was driven by a preference for sons/male offspring, but there is no citation for this claim. I did a quick search and the information I found for the one-child policy was about curbing population growth, not because of the preference for male offspring. Logically, having a one-child rule wouldn't help with a male off-spring preference in Chinese culture. I would double check/find some reliable sources before leaving that claim in the article.

Wage inequality:  I would expand on "historical agricultural presence," and how that relates to pay gaps between men and women.

You might think about rewording some of your content. For example:

"China's social structure is patriarchal which has led to wage inequality between men and women.

I like how you added language about gender roles for context.

Family pressure and marriage: Some of the sentences are redundant with information that can probably be combined into more cohesive sentences.

For example: Child (early) marriage has historically been acceptable in Chinese culture, disproportionately impacting females under the age of 18. Until 1950 when laws were created to prohibit child marriage, underage girls wed to adult men made up the majority of these marriages, which furthered gender inequality in China. Justification for child marriage often stemmed from financial benefit to the maternal family, who would no longer be responsible for their female child as that was now the husbands responsibility.

Housing:  I like how you included a section about housing and how you connected it to gender inequality.

Some of the sentences here also read a bit redundant, I think this section can be pared down so it reads more smoothly but the information is good!

Education:  I like that you added information regarding the post-Mao era.

I would probably replace "son" with male and reword some of it so it's more smooth and cohesive.

Example: Due to the patriarchal social structure in China, male offspring are favored which has created inequality for women within China's education system. Because of this patriarchal structure and a preference towards males, they disproportionately receive an average of 1.3 years additional education than females. This has put additional pressure on males to achieve more academically which leads to higher better career prospects and higher wages....

Not trying to rewrite your article, just making suggestions on how to make it flow better.