User:KLReyes/sandbox


 * Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?
 * Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?
 * Does the draft submission reflect a neutral point of view? If not, specify...

Group 9 definitely improved the article, although its hard to know exactly which parts of the article they contributed to. It also doesn't appear that they achieved all of the goals they laid out. This could be that their ambitions were really high but ended up being too many edits and so they narrowed their approach. For example, they said they wanted to start a new section on costs of untreated antenatal depression but I don't see one. It could also be that someone else reverted their additions. Group 9 did succeed in adding a section about screening. I think this section adds great utility for readers because it informs them of what might be done if they suspect they have antenatal depression. I think this section could be improved by using simpler sentences. The paragraphs are very wordy with jargon that may be hard for lay people to follow. I think the article represents a supporting point of view for women with antenatal depression, but I feel the article may paint the condition in a bad light in the opening sections. For example, the article mentions multiple times that mood swings, body image, financial situations, unintended pregnancy, etc are possible causes of antenatal depression. I'm afraid that a woman reading this who has an unintended pregnancy may start to blame herself and be ashamed to seek help. It might be useful to point out that this is a natural thing that happens to some people and maybe talk about distributions across socioeconomic and racial backgrounds. Great job!!!

Paragraph: Set the style of your text. For example, make a header or plain paragraph text. You can also use it to offset block quotes.
' A'' : Highlight your text, then click here to format it with bold, italics, etc. The “More” options allows you to underline (U), cross-out text (S), add code snippets ( { } ), change language keyboards (Aあ), and clear all formatting ( ⃠ ). '''

Links: Highlight text and push this button to make it a link. The Visual Editor will automatically suggest related Wikipedia articles for that word or phrase. This is a great way to connect your article to more Wikipedia content. You only have to link important words once, usually during the first time they appear. If you want to link to pages outside of Wikipedia (for an “external links” section, for example) click on the “External link” tab.

Cite: The citation tool in the Visual Editor helps format your citations. You can simply paste a DOI or URL, and the Visual Editor will try to sort out all of the fields you need. Be sure to review it, however, and apply missing fields manually (if you know them). You can also add books, journals, news, and websites manually. That opens up a quick guide for inputting your citations. Once you've added a source, you can click the “re-use” tab to cite it again.


 * 1) Bullets: To add bullet points or a numbered list, click here.

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