User:KMBenison/James Haskins/Bmharden2 Peer Review

General info
KMBenison
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:KMBenison/sandbox
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):
 * James Haskins
 * James Haskins

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Your content is great overall! I especially enjoyed learning about James Haskins' life from the Biography section of the page. It makes me want to do more research on his life! I really like how you broke his biography into early life and later years to make it more expansive.
 * The main critique I have would be to do some editing on grammar! There are some mistakes throughout that could be fixed by running it through a Microsoft Word spelling and grammar check. I would also recommend Grammarly to catch those mistakes before publishing. Here are a couple of examples of what I'm referencing:
 * There should be an apostrophe after Haskins in the second sentence. It should read, "Haskins' hometown..."
 * There should also be an apostrophe after parents when you say, "parents' white boss."
 * When you say Haskins received an education across the globe, but just name states int he U.S., I would instead say he received an education from institutions across the country.
 * Instead of "him and his fellow peers," it should read, "he and his fellow peers."
 * (Those are just a few examples of some grammar mistakes. Grammarly will be able to catch all of them)!
 * Beware of run-on sentences. Try to break them up when you can.


 * I know you're likely not done yet, but make sure to add in your sources throughout your page.
 * Like I said, great work overall. I look forward to your final presentation!

-Brina Harden