User:KNNorm/Selective Service System/Kari.Harper Peer Review

General info
KNNorm
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:KNNorm/Selective Service System
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Selective Service System

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Article Content:

I like you thoughts to approach making a more diverse representation of gender in the Selective Service System. I agree that there does need to be a language shift from "men" to "people assigned male at birth". Do you think you will want to go and edit the "Gender" section of the article? Better yet, I think you could even add a little paragraph describing the issues at hand in terms of not acknowledging gender and further involvement in the services.

Bibliography:

I saw you had 2 sources which is good, how do you plan on using them? Are looking for to do a line by line edit in a particular section or are you going to do more content edits?