User:KSimoneweb/May December/Jhope54 Peer Review

General info
KSimoneweb
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:KSimoneweb/May December
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):May December

Evaluate the drafted changes
In looking at what you have added so far to your sandbox draft regarding the criticisms behind the release and story of the film May December, I see a lot that is going to be helpful in your contribution to the page, and ways to improve that information as well. In terms of the content you are adding to the page, I think it is extremely important to have some reference to the criticism the film has faced upon release, and I was surprised looking over the page itself that no such mention is available at all. Your content is also very relevant with the most recent one of your sources only dating back as far as January of this year, which gives a strong reasoning for why your edits do belong on the page. I think currently the viewpoint of your addition to the page is remaining in an unbiased realm, but it is an important note to keep track of as you add more to the page, as people often connect criticism to a bias against something. So far you have kept your source and your writing unbiased, only presenting condensed facts. It also speaks to the strength of what you are adding as an underrepresented viewpoint that hasn't been tackled on the page yet, which makes it more likely to be contested, but extremely valuable. Speaking of the sources you have added, I think that you have chosen a strong one as your first reference, it meets a lot of the guidelines that Wikipedia wants to see in a new source like coming from a reputable place, being a reflection of what you have written, and being current. If there is one place that you could improve your sources in terms of what Wikipedia wants, I would recommend adding a few more, most likely at least one after every sentence. The topic of criticism in reference to the film is a highly contentious and opinionated topic, but by backing up everything you say with a source that connects to a specific reference, the likelihood of the writing staying on the page increases because there is evidence that a more numerous and diverse group of writers are agreeing with what you are attempting to add to the page. In my opinion the structure of all your sentences so far is well written and concise, offering not only direct quotes from some individuals, but backstories of the controversy as well. I think that by adding this section, something else to consider that I have considered for my own project is adding your new topic to the introductory paragraph of the page as well. This keeps with the summarization required in the introductory sections of all Wikipedia pages and it is a great opportunity to add more of your writing to the page as a whole. Beyond that, I think you have a really strong start to your sandbox and I look forward to seeing what you add and what gets kept on the Wikipedia page itself.