User:KTilak02/Deinstitutionalisation (orphanages and children's institutions)/Sydneyd75 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(KTilak02)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:KTilak02/Deinstitutionalisation (orphanages and children's institutions)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Deinstitutionalisation (orphanages and children's institutions)
 * Deinstitutionalisation (orphanages and children's institutions)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think Katherine is doing a great job at editing this article. I like how you added to the lead paragraph, and included your own peer reviewed source to apply this. I especially like how you added an entire new paragraph to the article body regarding the section on Africa. You gave the readers more background information on how many orphans, and reasons for orphanages in Africa. This essentially made me understand more about the topic. Overall all of your edits are really great. The only thing I would potentially add is one more peer reviewed source, you could use this to add a bit of background (like you did to the Africa section) to the Asia section. This would help the readers grasp a better understanding and description of this section. Your organization and sentence structures are very concise and understandable. Also, I know you also brought up putting picture in your draft in class, I think this would be a great idea! Overall awesome job!

'''Thank you for the input-- I'll look to see if I can find sources for Asia! I can't figure out how to put a picture in, but it would have been a great addition :D'''