User:Kaanoi3/Eleotris sandwicensis/Zmsumida Peer Review

Aloha e Zmsumida,

Mahalo for your feedback. I added your suggestions to my article last week and have combined some phrases and sentences to add more of a dynamic flow.

Thank you,

Kaanoi3

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kaanoi3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Eleotris sandwicensis (Kaanoi3's sandbox draft)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Eleotris sandwicensis

Evaluate the drafted changes
All of the information and sources presented seem reliable and well-organized. I think my only suggestion would be to combine some sentences and rephrase or add onto the first line in the "Growth and Diet" section to provide a little bit more of a flow! For that particular sentence, maybe you could say "Although E. sandwicensis is a predator that will eat any fish that can fit in it's mouth, it's favorite is the hïhïwai or Neritina granosa, fresh snails." Overall, I think the new additions to the article have met all of the requirements of the prompts/sections that were required.