User:Kaatiegabrielle/Sentencing Reform Act/Tieram Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Kaatiegabrielle


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kaatiegabrielle/Sentencing Reform Act
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sentencing Reform Act

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Overall, the added sections (History, United States Sentencing Commission, The Commissions purposes are as follows (as stated from them), and Effects) are beneficial to the article. If anything, I would shorten the title of the third section. As a reader, I did not think the phrase "as stated from them" is needed because it is implied that the information is from them. Also, the formatting of following was a bit odd. I would take the "Current Commission Members:" out of the box format because it looks like a name is missing. Something like the formatting below might be easier to read:

Current Commission Members: Acting Chair, Judge Charles R. Breyer

EX Officio Commissioner, Patricia K. Cushwa

EX Officio Member Candice C. Wong

Other than that there were a few small grammar mistakes. For example, capitalize the word "T" in the sentence "the United States Sentencing Commission was vested to be an independent agency inside the Judicial Branch. Also, in the sentence "The Commission would be made up seven members each with a term of six years" the word "of" is needed between "up" and "seven." I would capitalize the first word in each sentence under the section "The Commissions purposes are as follows (as stated from them): " as it looks like a mistake with everything lowercase.

The only other comment I have is that it seems like you are missing a few citations. In particular the section "United States Sentencing Commission" only has one. Is everything in that section from the same source? If so, move the citation to the last sentence so that is implied. Right now, it looks like the ending half of the section has no source.