User:Kac1418/9to5/Bjbo1734 Peer Review

General info
Kac1418
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kac1418/9to5?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):9to5

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Does the lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Yes, the lead includes an introductory sentence that describes the article's topic more clearly and concisely than the current article portrays. The added information to the lead is well-written and is more clear than the previous article. The sentence explains what 9to5 stands for and the goals of the organization, which is a summary of the rest of the article to come.
 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes, the content added is relevant to the topic and adds more details than surface level facts displayed in the original article. The content added gives the reader more in-depth information and a better grasp of the topic. The content added gives specific dates, places, and names of each group involved in 9to5. The content also gives specific instances of sexual harassment and judgement to women, and exactly why 9to5 was created and such a successful group.
 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Yes, the content added is neutral. The facts given are from an objective standpoint that has no bias from the writer.
 * Are the sources current?
 * Yes, the sources added are current, as one is from 2017, another from 2018, and the one from 1999 takes a step back from the movement and is removed from the time period of 9to5.
 * Is the content added well-written?
 * Yes, the content is well-written using active adjectives and verbs and describes the information given extremely well. The added content gives the reader a very good picture of the information and is easy to read.
 * Are the images laid out in an appealing way?
 * There are no images in the original article or the sandbox
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * The strengths of the content added is the quality of information and in-depth insight to the people within 9to5. The sources are well placed and back up the information extremely well. The content added gives more than just blanket statements about the movement, but the causes and effects of each instance within the movement, whether it be a strike or a survey.