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Article Evaluation

The article I am evaluating is the article Arab Slave Trade. What struck me right away about this article is that there are only a few sentences at the beginning explaining what it is, and then goes right in to how someone else contests if that term is a correct term. I think if Walter Rodney agrees or not with the term should be further down in the article, not at the beginning when they are just discussing what the trade even is. I would add more to the section Arab Views on African People because I think that is pretty central to the article, yet there are only a few sentences, only giving a couple people's perspectives. This article therefore for instance with this section does not provide a large-scale image of what Arab views were on African people.Additionally the legacy section is very short and ends with a sentence that says,"There has also been a considerable genetic impact on Arabs throughout the Arab world from pre-modern African and European slaves", but then there is no elaboration on that which I think would be important to include. On the Talk page some conversations revolved around if the sources cited supported claims being made. Another conversation revolved around if the page showed US bias in the way the article is worded. This article is a part of 7 wikiprojects. Article Selection

Beta Israel is about the Ethiopian Jewish community. The section specifically about Ethiopian Jews in Israel is of interest to me and the discrimination they face. On the talk page it discusses how certain sources are not reliable. Additionally, I think there is western bias in this article. Another topic that is of interest to me is the Arab Slave Trade which I had previously wrote about. A third topic I am interested in is the African diaspora. On the talk page it says that the numbers dispersed in some countries like in Italy is not correct. Additionally, there are certain spots where citation links do not go to anything. The one I am leaning towards the most is about the Ethiopian Jewish community.

Adding to an Article

I am writing about the discrimination in Israel that Ethiopian Jews face. I think not only the numbers of people they comprise but the percentage they represent in the population should be added, and they make up about a little more than one percent of the population. Also, while Operation Moses and Operation Solomon are discussed the new wave of immigration since the mid 1990s has occurred of Christian converts which they call Falas Mura.

Additionally, when talking about the hardships Ethiopian jews have faced it should be added that the rate of Ethiopian out who has dropped out of school has increased dramatically as well as the rate of juvenile delinquency. There are also high incidences of suicide and depression among this community.

This information was all from the article Ethiopian Emerging Adult Immigrants in Israel

Walsh, Sophie D., and Rivka Tuval-Mashiach. “Ethiopian Emerging Adult Immigrants in Israel.” Youth & Society, vol. 44, no. 1, 2011, pp. 49–75., doi:10.1177/0044118x10393484.

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Copied from Beta Israel

The Ethiopian Beta Israel community in Israel today comprises more than 121,000 people. Most of this population are the descendants and the immigrants who came to Israel during "Operation Moses" (1984) and "Operation Solomon" (1991). Civil war and famine in Ethiopia prompted the Israeli government to mount these dramatic rescue operations. The rescues were within the context of Israel's national mission to gather Diaspora Jews and bring them to the Jewish homeland. Some immigration has continued up until the present day. Today 81,000 Ethiopian Israelis were born in Ethiopia, while 38,500 or 32% of the community are native born Israelis.

Despite progress, Ethiopian Jews are still not well assimilated into Israeli-Jewish society. They remain, on average, on a lower economic and educational level than average Israelis. Also, while marriages between Jews of different backgrounds are very common in Israel, marriages between Ethiopians and non-Ethiopians are not very common. According to a 2009 study, 90% of Ethiopian-Israelis – 93% of men and 85% of women, are married to other Ethiopian-Israelis. A survey found that 57% of Israelis consider a daughter marrying an Ethiopian unacceptable and 39% consider a son marrying an Ethiopian to be unacceptable. Barriers to intermarriage have been attributed to sentiments in both the Ethiopian community and Israeli society generally. A 2011 study showed that only 13% of high school students of Ethiopian origin felt "fully Israeli".

Discrimination and racism against Israeli Ethiopians is still perpetuated. In May 2015 Israeli Ethiopians demonstrated in Tel Aviv and Jerusalem against racism, after a video was released, showing an Israeli soldier of Ethiopian descent that was brutally beaten up by the Israeli police. Interviewed students of Ethiopian origin affirm that they do not feel accepted in Israeli society, due to a very strong discrimination towards them. I would add after the first sentence of the first paragraph that the Ethiopian Jews make up a little more than 1 percent of the Israeli population.

In the second paragraph after saying that the Ethiopian Jews remain on average on a lower economic and educational level than average Israelis I would add that the rate of Ethiopians who have dropped out of school has increased dramatically as well as the rate of juvenile delinquency, and that there are high incidences of suicide and depression among this community.

I also think it is worth noting the event that occurred in 1996 called the “blood bank affair” where blood banks were not using Ethiopian blood because of the fear of HIV being generated from their blood showing the harsh discrimination against them.

it is also worth noting in a new paragraph that recently the discrimination as scholar Ben-Eliezer explores has created a new feeling of “Blackness” in young Ethiopians identities. The cultural racism, exclusion, and discrimination has resulted in the new generation a reclaiming of their names, language, culture, and music.Metaphorically therefore the discrimination has sent many of the new generation back to Africa.

This information was all from the article Ethiopian Emerging Adult Immigrants in Israel

Walsh, Sophie D., and Rivka Tuval-Mashiach. “Ethiopian Emerging Adult Immigrants in Israel.” Youth & Society, vol. 44, no. 1, 2011, pp. 49–75., doi:10.1177/0044118x10393484.

In the section of Ethiopian Jews in Israel the added information is followed by citation 115.

Edited wording of last two sentences to be: Many scholars such as Ben-Eliezer have been exploring how the discrimination, cultural racism, and exclusion have resulted in metaphorically sending many of the new generation of Ethiopian Jews "back to Africa". They say this because many of the new generation have been reclaiming their traditional Ethiopian names, Ethiopian language, Ethiopian culture, and Ethiopian music.

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Beta Israel

All added contributions under section Population, then Ethiopian Jews in Israel.