User:Kahmilmo/Skin care/Annapiwko27 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kahmilmo, Jmwhitfi23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kahmilmo/Skin_care?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Skin care

Evaluate the drafted changes
This section includes a lot of valuable information, however more citation is necessary. For example, when you claim that smoking worsens the appearance of wrinkles, be sure to add a citation at the end of the sentence. While most of the information may be common knowledge, it should still have a citation from a reputable source. The information that has been added does not appear to be biased, and generally informs the reader about skin care information as we age. Be sure to go back and correct any spelling errors in the section. The information is clear and concise, informing the audience. Some of the sentences are short, and may be able to be combined into other sentences. Overall, the content is good, but it needs more reliable citations to back up the information that is stated. Your edits include neutral, unbiased, and informative information, but require more footnotes, and general spelling/grammar checks.