User:Kaileync/Perianal cellulitis/Ayaide Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kaileync, Sschneider2, Nelbershawi, Coshita46


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Perianal cellulitis
 * Perianal cellulitis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Question 1. Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?

Yes, the article is substantially improved. The lead section is a concise summary of the condition that is further explained in the later sections. The topics covered are relevant and are ones that I felt gave me a well-rounded view of the condition without delving in too deep. The sources used also seem to be reliable, mostly coming from journals. One thing that I would consider adding is images of the condition/signs and symptoms.

Question 2. Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?

Yes, the article feels complete as it now covers the bases of causes, mechanism, signs and symptoms, treatment, and prevention. Adding a history section could help round out the article (first recorded case, historical context, etc.)

Question 3. Does the article meet Wikipedia guidelines? Does the draft submission reflect a neutral point of view?

For the most part, yes. "It is important to note that historically" in the etiology section could be rephrased to sound more neutral. I would also consider removing "primarily family members" and "parents of infants" in the signs and symptoms section as this is an assumption. It could be replaced with "caretakers" or something more general.