User:Kaimcamc/Emotional labor/Asp.woods Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kaimcamc


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kaimcamc/Emotional labor


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:Kaimcamc/Emotional labor

Lead
The lead has been updated to reflect the new content added by this author. The lead could be simplified a little to make it clearer what this work is truly going to be about. The introductory sentence is very long so that could be simplified or shorten a little. The lead contains a lot that the rest of the article does not include.

Content
The content that is added is up to date and relevant to the topic. There is content missing in the body that was talked about in the lead. There is also information included in the body that is not mentioned in the lead. I think this topic is an underrepresented topic that is slowly gaining popularity and the author did a nice job of mentioning that.

Tone and Balance
The content added is neutral but maybe a little bit incomplete. I think the author tried hard to remain neutral and represent all sides fairly and equally. I don't feel like there is over or under representation anywhere in the article. Overall, there are a few statements that the neutral voice could be improved on so I would recommend just reviewing the article and looking for that and making some minor adjustments there.

Sources and References
The content is backed up with reliable sources that do accurately reflect what the cited sources say. The sources are thorough and current on the literature related to the topic, as well as come from a diverse group of authors. They are all peer reviewed and seem credible and all the links work. The only thing I would say about them is there is only 5 references, try to incorporate as many of the 10 from your bibliography as you can.

Organization
The content could be a little clearer because as someone who doesn't know very much about this topic it was a little hard to understand the first time through. The organization is very well done, the text is just bolded on some sections and not others so that minor change can be made to help the article look neater.

Overall impressions
Overall I think going through to clear up some of the run on sentences would be helpful as well as adjusting the formatting and making sure everything is neutral. The article could benefit from a few more references as well as making sure it is easy to understand for someone who is learning about this topic for the first time. Overall very minor adjustments, good work.