User:Kaimcamc/Emotional labor/Mazariegos lorena Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kaimcamc


 * Link to draft you're reviewing

Sandbox Emotional Labor


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Emotional Labor

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The new section about teaching was added to the lead, which reflects the changes that have been made.

Content

I like the fact that you added information on teachers, as that seems to be a content gap that was present in the article. I think that it is good that you added more recent information to the Wikipedia page, especially in the Police Work section, as the existing article is over 20 years old. I think you did a good job adding up-to-date information to the three sections between the Careers section.

Tone and balance

From what I can see so far with your additions, it seems that overall you are keeping a neutral tone. The only part where I suggest adding the citation again is where it says "Early childhood education is very important to a child's development" in the teachers section, as the part "very important" seems like a really strong position rather than a neutral one.

Sources and References

I would say that your sources may not be as recent, but they continue to be relevant. If possible, I would recommend adding more recent sources. But the ones that you added are still okay, as they contribute important information. I would also recommend looking for a larger variety of sources from authors from other regions if possible. I noticed that you have China and the Netherlands, but more diverse views would help address different perspectives. For what I can see, your link works well.

Organization

I like the way you continue to respect and follow the order of the current article. I do think that your additions are clear and easy to follow when readingnt article. I do think that your additions are clear and easy to follow when reading. My only question would be, where are you adding the new information in the gender section? Where is it going to fit within the existing article?

Images and Media

N/A

Overall Impressions

I think that your additions are good. I really like the fact that you are adding teachers to the list of careers, as they are really important on this topic. Great work addressing that content gap. My only recommendation would be to make sure that the lead is up-to-date and that when you move your additions to the main article, make sure that they do not disrupt the flow of the article.