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1) Lightning Injury 2) PMID: 18395987 3)Kaitlyn Rourke Runde, D. P. (2018, March). Lightning Injuries. Retrieved from https://www.merckmanuals.com/en-ca/home/injuries-and-poisoning/electrical-and-lightning-injuries/lightning-injuries I wanted a source that presented a concise overview of the topic. I went to the HONcode database, a collection of HONcode certified website. I searched lightning injury OR lightning strike as the query. Merck Manual article was the second result Using the above searching on the HONcode search, the following sources were also considered

The Merck manual was chosen over the other sources. Firstly, it emphasizes the medical aspects surrounding lightning injury, such as symptoms, diagnosis, prognosis and treatment. On the other hand, the other sources emphasized prevention, which is not the focus of the Wikipedia article. Furthermore, Merck Manual was written very concisely and objectively, whereas the other articles were written more colloquial and spoke directly to the patient. The writing style made it easier to absorb the key details. The source meets the Wikipedia guidelines: Secondary source about lightning injuries, summarizing Reviewed and revised periodically Published by a reliable, independent publishing source (certified by HONcode) This resource is excellent to orient myself on the relatively unfamiliar topic, lightning injuries. It is written in an encyclopedia format, helping us in restructuring the Wikipedia article. It contains information on symptoms, diagnosis, treatment and prognosis, which can all be included in our article. Finally, it is written very concisely, allowing the key information to be unstood and included in the Wikipedia page.

Assignment 3
Proposed change #1: In the introduction section, we plan on adding 1-2 sentences to give more context to lightning injuries. "Although the current flow occurs over a short period, the amount of current is significant (approximately 30 million volts). Lightning is neither a DC or an AC current. It is best describes as a unidirectional massive current impulse of electrons " We plan on explaining how much current is stored in lightning, which flows quickly over a short period of time. Rational: We wish to give readers an idea of the immense power stored in lightning. This is important in understanding why a strike can be so devastating. We chose to place this information in the introduction, as it sets up context for the rest of the article, which outlines the injuries, prognosis and long-term effects. Multiple sources corroborate the immense power of lightning strikes, leading to no evidence of controversy.


 * Thanks for adding to this. Just one small typo - "It is best described (not describes)....." - HW

Proposed change #2: To the “health effect section”, we plan on removing the irrelevant information. The sentence about lightning being “This is about five times hotter than the surface of the sun”, as well as the example given about the destruction of a basement insulator will be removed " Hot lightning(high-current lightning) which lasts for more than a second can deposit immense energy, melting or carbonizing large objects. One such example is the destruction of the basement insulator of the 250 m (820 ft) high central mast of the Orlunda radio transmitter, which led to its collapse". We will add a sentence about how lightning injuries usually do not damage the surface of the skin, due to the brief duration of exposure: "The brief duration of the exposure frequently limits the damage to the outer layer of skin" .Rational: The purpose of these edits is to make the article more concise and direct. A brief statement about the strength of a strike is suffice for the reader to understand. Although these interesting facts were originally included, we do not feel they help the reader. Additionally, it is important for the reader of the article to be able to recognize lightning injury. For this reason, it is important to outline that minimal skin damage expected. Additionally, someone treating the injury can focus their attention to the other physiological effects of the strike. There is no varied opinion about these changes.


 * I still don't see the exact sentence you are adding re: how lightning injuries usually don't damage the surface of the skin though I like the concept/idea. I think it is worth adding if you can come up with a good sentence to encapsulate the point. I think if it follows your above sentence about lightning strikes it will help put the injury into context. (ie since lightning is massive current but over really short amount of time there isn't always significant external signs of injury etc) - HW

Critique of sources: Davis, Chris; Engeln, Anna; Johnson, Eric L.; McIntosh, Scott E.; Zafren, Ken; Islas, Arthur A.; McStay, Christopher; Smith, William R.; Cushing, Tracy (2014-12). "Wilderness Medical Society Practice Guidelines for the Prevention and Treatment of Lightning Injuries: 2014 Update". Wilderness & Environmental Medicine. 25 (4): S86–S95. doi:10.1016/j.wem.2014.08.011. Our information comes from Wilderness Medicine textbook from a crediting agency. There are no concerns with the source. It is a peer reviewed, well-written secondary source, compiling current literature about lightning injury. It has been cited by numerous other well-established journals. We feel confident sharing its information on Wikipedia.