User:Kaitlin3farrell/Calupoh/Ritup1212 Peer Review

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kaitlin3farrell
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Looking at the original and looking at yours I can see that you made so much progress like the amount of content you have added is crazy. I know you were telling me how you have translate Spanish to English, so I can tell that you're already putting in the hard work. The lead is not overly detailed but I think it needs a little more, just a tiny bit. Like I can see where the article is going, but a few more sentences won't hurt. There is so much that you've added, it crazy. Looking at the original and your work. And you do a good job on staying on the topic. It doesn't feel like random information thrown into it. It's well organized and flows together. I can tell that the tone is balanced and it doesn't lean one way or the other, it's neutral and informative. I don't see any sources or references. I'm guessing you're just trying to figure out how to put them in. I would say add a little more pictures so it's not just text heavy.