User:Kaligibbons/Sepia lycidas/Tshadday Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kaligibbons


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kaligibbons/Sepia lycidas


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sepia lycidas

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
The lead is fairly short and sort of a run on sentence, so I would recommend breaking it up into two sentences. I would also recommend bolding the first uses of the scientific name and the common name to make them stand out more. The lead should have some general details about your species that you talk about later in the page. Also, to make that box with the species, you want to hit "Insert" -> "Template" -> and add the "Speciesbox" template. Once you added that template, you will want to hit "add more information" and search for "Taxon" and add that in along with the taxonomic name "Sepia lycidas" and it will automatically make the table for you. A good way to learn how people made theirs is to go to another wikipedia page on some other species, hit edit, then click on and edit their species box and get an idea of what you need and how to add it.

Content
The general content you have so far looks good, it just needs to be put into paragraph form. Some other general sections you might want to add, given you have the sources, is a description, diet and how they get their food, and behavior. So far each section has a good amount of information and looks promising.

Tone and Balance
Your information is very neutral and unbiased, so it is good there.

Sources and References
When you give information from a source, you should cite it right after by clicking the "Cite" button on the top row and pasting the link or article name in the box and it should automatically make it for you and add the sources under your references tab in order of when they appear. If they don't appear under your references for some reason after you add the citation, go to the first row after your References line and click "Insert" on the top bar -> "Template" -> and search for "Reflist" and it will add it for you. Your current references look good and applicable, but you will need a few more for the final edition.

Organization
Your organization of the heading sections looks good so far. You can add subheading (like the "Lead", "Content", etc. above in the bigger bold text) to help divide up your headings and give each section sub sections to make it easier to find specific information. Your writing style looks good so far. The 2nd sentence under the Distribution and Habitat heading, "They prefer tropical to temperate environments and temperatures and are a benthic species, typically found at depths ranging from 15-100 meters", is a being long winded. I would suggest dividing it up into 2 sentences like "They prefer tropical to temperate environments and temperatures. This species is benthic and is typically found at depths ranging from 15-100meters" (with citations).

Images and Media
There are no images or anything yet, but the Species box is a great place to put one or two. To add images, you will want to search for non-copyright ones, so wikimedia commons is a great place. I found 4 images for you on there through this link https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Category:Sepia_lycidas

Overall Impression
It appears like you have a good overall structure for how you are going to write your article. You have a lot of information and points ready to be expanded upon and you seem ready to go. A lot of the technical stuff is tricky, so hopefully my instructions will help out some. Another useful thing is that link tool in the bar that looks like two chains attached right beside the cite button. If you highlight something and click that button, it will automatically create a little description of that thing. An example is if I mention cuttlefish and the reader can hover over the word cuttlefish to get a quick understanding and link to the page on cuttlefish. Good job on your rough draft, just be sure to add citations, find some more references, and add those few technical things and you will be all set.