User:Kalinatodorov/Urban agriculture in West Oakland/Imanqadir Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kalinatodorov


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kalinatodorov/Urban_agriculture_in_West_Oakland?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Urban agriculture in West Oakland

Evaluate the drafted changes
You have a really great draft full of interesting and relevant information. As someone who knows very little about food systems, I really enjoyed reading your draft! In terms of organization, the flow and structure are pretty good. I would recommend moving your first section about urban agriculture to a different section, maybe under the history section. In terms of content, the information you wrote is really good and offers a lot of information on the topic. I would also recommend changing your subheading about food sovereignty in the East Bay to "food sovereignty" more broadly or to narrow the information in this section to specific discussions about the East Bay only. Right now, it seems like its just a broader discussion about food sovereignty with very little connection to the East Bay. In terms of grammar, there aren't any prominent grammatical errors, just a few spelling errors. Overall, your draft is really great!