User:KamanaMS/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Manodharma

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
Personally, I chose this article because I wanted to delve into a subject I was genuinely interested in. I've been especially interested in improvisation in Indian classical music and its something I've been working on myself. This interest guided by topic choice. However the article itself caught my interest because it expressed a specific need for more citations and verification, which is a particular ask to focus on for this assignment. In addition, with my introductory understanding of the subject, I imagine there is far more content that can be included on this page for a fuller, more accurate picture of the topic at hand.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section: The article itself is basically a lead section and nothing more. It provides a general understanding but does not go beyond.

Content: While the article has general content and a reader will get take always, there is room for greater detail in the theory, practice, and history of Manodharma (or spontaneous improvisation). There are also jargon words like "prayogas" that might further confuse readers who are not familiar with the vocabulary of Indian classical music. While some of these terms are linked to other Wikipedia articles, others are not so require explanation.

Tone and Balance: The article does about balanced and in a neutral tone. It represents facts and simply explains an important facet of Indian classical music, but it could be clearer and should not assume its audience knows all the subsequent terms that are used.

Sources and References: This article is sorely lacking in sources. It has ONE source, an article from "The Hindu", which is a popular daily publication. There are certainly other verified and peer reviewed sources that can be linked for an information-rich page. There are also several question marks on the page about claims that need a source suggesting a large scope for collecting more accurate and credible references.

Organization: There is essentially a two-line lead, and a basic background section that could be fleshed out into more detailed sections. The writing, while grammatically correct, has room for improvement in regards to more accessible language, sentence structure, and vocabulary.

Images and Media: None. Some Wikipedia articles about music might have recordings embedded and this might be a worthwhile addition to a subject which is about improvisation in Indian classical music. There are many, many samples, some that I am sure have Creative Commons licenses or other fair use licenses that can be used to give readers a concrete example of what this topic actually sounds like.

Talk Page Discussions: None.

Overall Impressions: There is much room for improvement. Though this page is considered of low importance, its actually a topic I have searched for in the past. I've been disappointed about the lack of detail on the subject, and I am sure there are other with a specific interests in music, Indian classical music, or non-Western music traditions that may want a detailed introduction to a very key part of Indian music which is shared by other world traditions (like jazz). As an Indian music nerd, I am invested in this! It could be better developed.

The articles current strengths is that it links to many other Wikipedia article and makes a number of claims that can be expanded on. It contains significant information that needs to be fleshed out more and attributed to references.

Main Points of Focus:

1) Improve and diversify citations

2) Explain or simplify jargon terms

3) Create sub-sections for detailed information

4) Possibly begin populating this sub-sections with information