User:Kameron.tomlin1/Valley of Childish Things/E1718r Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kameron.tomlin1 Valley of Childish things


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kameron.tomlin1/Valley_of_Childish_Things?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The draft flows nicely and has a nice lead that leaves readers wanting more. I think you have a great draft. If you could add a little more information within your biography about how this specific story was created that would add an important touch. I also understand there may not be any information on that given aspect. If Wharton overcame the struggles of her husbands mental illness with writing etc. would be a great connection if relevant.